Friday, December 23, 2005

this gift that illuminates the room

i can not get closer
or walk away
from this gift
that illuminates
the room
i'm standing in.
...
...
i want to stay and admire your beauty
unravel the story behind the colors
and discover why i'm so captivated
by your presence.
...
...
this mysteriousness
has seduced me
and tempted me
to untie the red bow
that confines you
and peal the layers
that surround you
and conceal you
so that i can feel you.
...
...
but i know that the timing isn't right
so instead i encircle you with my eyes
examining every angle in hopes
of finding what you hide.
...
...
i don't dare
get closer
because i don't
want to read
the tag which
could declare
that you belong
to someone else.
...
...
that you were just a gift
i was meant to adore
but never to unwrap
and keep as mine.

26 comments:

Lorena said...

Hope you all have a Merry Christmas!!

DeeM said...

Happy Holidays, Lorena!
Hope it's a wonderful one.

sirbarrett said...

You've unhatched a nice poem here and it does a subtle dance with your words. Hope your gifts are as wonderful on the inside as they look from the outside. Merry Christmas! Keep that gift under wraps until the perfect time, then make it yours.

Dan Husain said...

Oh I loved the ending! So tender! :-)

Merry X-mas Lorena! :-)

Ghost Particle said...

Hi lorena! Beautiful poem.

A merry Xmas and a happy new year for you and the family. Have fun!

Love always.

kiraN said...

nice poem..
Merry Christmas :)

mermaid said...

Clever, Lorena. Avoiding the tag is easy, but knowing you, you 'll read it anyway, and only accept the gift that is yours. I know how annoying it can be when someone says, "the right one will come along". Our sense of "right" is often warped. I'd like to think of it someone who enters our lives to teach us something. We may perceive them as "right" or "wrong", but if you learn from them, then they were "right" at the time.

Roger Stevens said...

I really like this poem. It does have a sense of mystery - it's no ordinary gift. You could even take that idea a little further.
And I love the layout.

(I really liked your last poem, too. You're on a roll... Hope it's not too personal and current.)

Hey - have a Wonderful Christmas and a great New Year.

eden said...

hey MERRY CHRISTMAS ! and have a WONDERFUL YEAR!

EGO SVM CAROLVS said...

merry christmas!! :]

chikididu said...

Sometimes you are only allowed to see something and keep whatever feelings you have for that thing you see inside. Like those Prada shoes or Kate Spade bags behind the glass windows that you can't afford, though they're 50% off.

And mermaid, how I cannot agree more with you! That's exactly how I always feel. Whenever we meet someone who can make us breathe faster and turn our knees as weak as jelly, 'our sense of "right" is often warped'. Well said!

Shubhodeep said...

i love these lines:

"but i know that the timing isn't right
so instead i encircle you with my eyes
examining every angle in hopes
of finding what you hide."

well said.

hope you had a gr8 christmas. wish you a happy new year ahead

do drop into my blog sometime.
http://shubhodeep.blogspot.com
(btw, i added your link)

Lorena said...

thanks DeeM!

sirbarrett :: i will do so, thanks :)

dan husain :: thank you. hope you had a great holiday.

ghost particle :: thanks. happy new year to you and your family as well!!

kiron :: thanks for visiting :)

mermaid :: yeah, i believe that. great point. thanks :)

roger stevens :: thank you :) hope you have a happy new year.

thanks eden, likewise.

thank you carolvs! hope you had a great one.

chikididu :: great point. to much kept inside though can be to much to carry sometimes. i love expressing myself and when i can't it's dispiriting but i see your point.

shubhodeep :: thank you. happy holidays to you as well. will drop by, thanks :)

-raindrops- said...

that last verse did it for me...

happy holidays, lore! .:big hug:.

Lavinia said...

Thank you for keeping your lovely blog going for us during the holidays, much appreciated.

I hope you and your loved ones have a beautiful holiday season and a wonderful new year.

iamnasra said...

How sad that we can just a dmire this gift and it can be for us to hold...

This is poem how touching it is still made me feel sad

Roger Stevens said...

Yes, happy New Year - and here's to another year of top blogging.

Lorena said...

hi rain, thanks *big Hug* back :)

lavinia, thanks :) best wishes for a happy new year to you and your family as well!!

nasra, thanks. it is sad being able to only admire someone from afar.

roger stevens, yes i hope we all stay blogging in the new year!

EATING POETRY said...

This poem is beautiful. It captures the mood of the Indian Giver. Hopefully this Christmas, you got a present, or were with someone, you can actually keep!

I'm glad you visited my blog. You're never behind, I keep everything I've ever posted on the main page for exactly that reason.

Lorena said...

thanks for dropping by!!
i did get some intangible gifts which i guess are the priceless kind.

glad to meet another great blogger :)

Russell Ragsdale said...

Great use of metaphore, I don't think I've ever heard of a gift used quite this way! Great poem! Hope the holidays have been great and the New Year will be even better than you can hope for!

Danny Sillada said...

I like these lines very much:

"that you were just a gift
i was meant to adore
but never to unwrap
and keep as mine..."

Compelling, Lorena.

Madayaw na Bag-ong Tuig!

Lorena said...

thank you russell :) hope you have a great New Year as well!!

thanks danny :) was that "happy new year" in your language? thanks!! take care.

GEL said...

Hi- I liked your gift package holiday season metaphors. I could feel the tension like what happens when one wonders about the contents of that unopened gift. Nice!!

Happy New Year, L!

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

I think this is my favourite to date, it would be a wonderful gift to anyone PS. how do you prevent all your letters sliding to one side?

Lorena said...

thanks silvermoon. glad it could be felt!
happy 2006 as well!!

hi sue hardy-dawson, thank you.
ps ? : i'm using the right/left/center alignment. i hope this is what you were asking and not some philosophical question :)