one broken flower
a new home between pages
your color changes
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(my first attempt at a haiku : )
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you rescued a flower from the ground
so that it wouldn't get run over
and gave it to me, it was so sweet.
a broken flower
to mend my broken spirit.
i kept twirling it rapidly between my fingers,
the energy must have been coming
from all that i was feeling that day
and it seems that we healed each other
because it lifted my spirits, i was feeling better
and this flower found a new home in my memories
and this moment
will always bring a smile to my face.
thank you mary.
42 comments:
That is sweet! So the flower didn't break? Kudos to Mary for putting you in a positive direction! Flowers in peril seem so much more fragile and beautiful. This poem is great.
oh you're so sweet. well this wasn't really a poem, unless you mean my attempt at a haiku? anyhow, thanks. hmmm, is this a deep question "so the flower didn't break?" i guess not. now you got me thinking :) why didn't the word 'fragile' come to mind when i was writing this. thanks for adding it!!
I love the way you wrote
one broken flower
a new home between pages
your color changes
I feel it is so romantic as on those who love a flower. As this see falling..they pick it up and give a home between pages....
The flower adopt itself in its new home....
How touching your Haiku impression..
I feel your poetry have evolved so much(I dont if this is a good word to use)
yes this one is sweet. is that a dried flower? i mean the photo. maybe from a love one?
Lorena, i took the time today to go through your posts here. i am so inspired by your photographs. i love the shots in mexico, and the children.
and your poetry, as well- your photos, though, you photos are poetry. it reminds me of that famous little sculpture, "poetry in motion."
lorena - the kind hearted soul - we expect this compassion only from an angel like you.
And a very good attempt at haiku!
:-)
Love the metaphor of,
"a broken flower
to mend my broken spirit."
The Haiku is great,
and also the lines
'a broken flower to mend my broken spirit...'
Excellent poem.
Lorena,
I'm amazed how even though you're not trying, your photos and words do come together like poetry (always)! This is such a beautiful piece as I *love* flowers and have an especially soft spot for anything a little broken...flowers and people included. :)
"a broken flower
to mend my broken spirit"
sweet :P ...i love the fact that the flower was rescued not picked!!!
Lovely immagery, I might save this to send to a friend who's feeling down with some flowers. Love the pictures below too the words work so well with them
iamnasra :: thank you. that is a great word as i feel that change in myself. always appreciate your feedback :)
amie :: eventually it will be, stuck between pages. definitely from a special person :)
thanks.
rhein :: thank you. that is a very high compliment for me.that the photographs can be seen as poetry, makes me happy!
bablu :: thank you, you are sweet :)
.:A:. & ghost particle - thank you! :)
stella :: thanks. yeah, we can't go through life without breaking a couple of times. there is beauty in someone a little "broken".
just muttering :: yeah, i definitely saw the sweetness of it afterwards :) thanks.
sue hardy-dawson :: thank you. i hope your friend feels better :)
corinna :: that really means a lot, that it can touch a heart, thanks for saying that :)
Hurt is real; scars are a history of pain written in a strange letters. Healing is a remembrance; we can find in it happy beauty and a wholeness that transcends damage. Remembrance can bring us peace and joy. we all need to hear the happy message you tell!
Sometimes the fewest words and lines say the most. I liked the last line "the color changes" the best. Have you ever heard of a song by Mission UK called "Butterfly on a Wheel?"
Its excellent Lorena... it seems the words came from the core of ur heart...... keep it up....
so precious. this made me miss a lot of moments with friends. yours is wonderfully moving reminder.
As always, your talent shines through in everything you post. Whether it be words or picutres, you always leaves me speechless and wishing for more.
If I may say so without sounding disrespectful, the only thing more beautiful than the things you write is the picture of you in your profile.
such eyes to have, when,
seeing faded, crushed flowers
the poet heart smiles
Thanks, Lorena--it made my day!
Mike
love your haiku! it is so tender and sweet...much like you I must add :)
It lifted my spirits just reading about it... =o)
russell :: thank you! it is amazing how such innocent small gestures really make a difference. i know they have the most impact for me. thanks for the wise words you left here :)
mermaid :: happy to see you back!! i never have but soon i will look up the lyrics :) thanks.
tomas :: thank you :) very encouraging. i always felt appreciative of the small things, that i have eyes to 'see' like this and its a high compliment to hear it from someone else.
avik :: thank you, they did :)
transience :: yay, you're back!! :) and thanks.
joe :: wow, thanks for all the compliments. it really lifted my spirits!! :)
mike :: well thanks for those verses :) made my day in return!!
anil :: ahhh, you're sweet, thanks :)
potted-flower :: thank you. i'm happy to see you are back, hurray!!
jadedprimadonna :: i'm happy to hear that :) how sweet.
two great poems but especially liked the Haiku.
That was really touching. I liked how everything flows.. and how you got the flower to somehow be connected it to your feelings.
Nice :)
Its been ages since I've seen a pressed flower. I used to collect and press them every summer when I was younger. Thank you for reminding me.
The haiku is wonderful. Are you going to write more?
Insipired and touching..awesome...
I think little incidents like that do cause small incremental changes, as your haiku suggests...
dang girl write a book already... your full of good stuff. i would buy it.
cocaine jesus :: thank you :)
enigma :: thanks & glad for your visit! :)
lavinia :: did you? that is so cool. that would be a nice thing to do. thanks re: haiku. i hope to make more attempts :)
thanks promethuis!
paul :: yes they do. brings a little sunshine on a cloudy day :)
decomposed :: you are too sweet! :) at least i know i have one buyer, that's good enough!!
Hey Lor,
There are people who understand all the greatness that life offers. These peoole are a rare breed and its always amazing to come across one of those people. You have an amazing mind and im glad i stumbled on your blog.
The world needs more sweet nostalgia. Thanks for sharing. . . . : )
lovely poems and i loved the sweetness of the haiku! a broken spirit is as fragile as a broken flower...so precious, so tender.
freinds picking us up when we are feeling broken are precious!
Hope you are feeling better now.
hi allister, you know that is one of the highest compliments i can ever recieve and i do thank you for warming my heart with such kind words. i'm also glad i met you :) thank you!
thanks anonymous poet :)
grumblefish :: well i'm glad you left a comment so i can follow it to your blog! i apprecite your sweet words, thanks.
gulnaz :: thanks. yes, the friends that can bring this kind of magic are priceless :)
pecos blue :: yes i am, thanks for asking :)
Nice flow and feeling.
Very nice.
Rock on!
GASP. The haiku swept me away! *applause*
^_^
Hey Lorena,
My first time here! Simple yet powerful post! :) Loved the way you have used your words..
The first 3 lines were veryyy nice! Pardon my ignorance, but i dont know what a 'haiku' is... Pls do tell me. Whtever it was, it was good :))))
Its a nice feeling, when we accidentally happen to come across a frail and delicate flower/leaf, as we skim through the pages of a book! Involuntarily, we tend to pick up the flower/leaf and twirl it in our hands, a thousand thoughts rushing thru our heads, without even we knowing it!! :)
hi rex, thanks :)
soulless :: your sweet, thank you :)
johnny boy:: thanks for sharing your thoughts. it is nice to run across such memories. "Haiku is one of the most important form of traditional japanese poetry" thanks for visiting.
I love the photo and the haiku. How charming.
What a beautiful poem and blog. Very original!
thank you dana. happy you visited :)
It touched me how you wrote of the tenderness of your friend caring for the life that is fragile and nurturing you. Lovely.
Enjoyed the nugget of the photo, too with its nostalgic (sepia?) tint.
SilverMoon
thanks and i loved how you put it "nurturing". it was :)
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